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Don't use chromatics.

Gamergod1995 down there has it right, it needs a LOT more. Here, I dl'd it and played around for like 5 mins and came up with this as an example of what you could do with it:

http://www.mediafire.com/?m0psgd43uo7 czys

Awesome sounding melody though, it just needs to be used in some way that it utilizes it's full badass potential.

Very cool, could use some work

This was indeed very epic, and awesome. Awesome sound overall, I love the epic sound of the beginning/1:36-1:48 crashes/stabs. Drumwork was very cool, even if it was just a loop or whatever, still sweet.

Suggestions: I kind of am missing the bassline here. That would sound totally sweet, a deep-ish bass either just pumping along with the rhythm guitar the whole time, or maybe with it's own melody. If there is one, then I'm just not hearing it.

Also, the lead guitar part is really... strange. The one that starts at 0:48, it kind of... transforms into a biting crunchy distortion into like a... Softer kind of jazz distortion. If there was something I would change for sure in the song, that would be it. If you need a better guitar VST or just anything cooler to mess around with, then I'm sure you can find a cool free one on KVRAudio's website. Just KVRAudio.com, they have free synths and stuff that would totally help out.

One more thing, maybe I'm not catching it but it doesn't sound like there is too much variation from the first time through to when the song "repeats" at 1:36. Try giving some variation in the second time through, add in new voices/parts, write a new solo or whatever. Just give it a little something new the second time through.

Awesome job though, keep up the badassness! Hope to see more from ya!

Dark, and surprisingly awesome.

This was really way cool. When the synths first came in I had my doubts because they kinda sounded detuned and strange, but as the song went on and other parts came in, it all came together really nicely. Digging the bass there. Also when the beat came in I thought it was a little... stale with just the little beat and the bass, but after the other parts came in it worked nicely.

Just a suggestion, you should vary your beat, the same kind of non-linear beat like this gets kind of boring over an extended period of time.

Also I have to say that I don't think this song fits within "Trance". The big thing that defines the different styles of a lot of electronica/techno is the beat. Your beat is not trance, but actually sounds somewhat reminiscent of a marching drumline. I think this would be better suited in just the "Techno" genre. Or if there was an "Electronica" genre, it would be perfect.

Anyway, I'd love to see this finished, maybe with a few different leads and melodies intertwining, that would be sweet. Keep it up dude!

AetherX responds:

Thanks for the great review! I put the weird synths in the beginning because I think they really set the mood I was going for.

The drumline and transitions are two big parts that I want to work on, I agree that more variation would be better. I think I got kind of lazy using the same one for the whole song.

About the genre, I've noticed that most of my songs fit more under "General Electronica" than anything else, but since that's not a choice I have to pick trance, techno, etc. Plus, trance songs seem to get more hits in less time than other songs do.

I'm a huge fan of your work by the way, I did a double take when I saw that you left me a review :D

Very awesome.

I love this damn song. It was the 3rd song I ever learned to play on the guitar. Very nostalgic for me.

It was very cool overall, but honestly I wish you'd have cut the chords short and made them kind of... bounce, or stutter along with the beat. That would have been cool. Like... cut them into eighth notes, then kill the offbeat eighths so it stutters. Or maybe even sixteenth.

I also think the main melody could have been louder. Maybe take an extra channel to play along with it? Idk.

Overall it was VERY sexy though.

Keep that shit up!

No direction.

The beat was cool, and the synths sounded fine but the melodies and harmonies were just... random. It kind of worked sometimes, but for the most part it was really confusing. It seemed almost like you weren't sure where you were going with this.

I would try to stay away from 'accidental' or chromatic scales like this (Consecutive halfsteps/semitones down 3 or more notes). They are very difficult to pull off and make it sound good without being weird. Maybe keep the intro chromatic then go into a different melody or something.

You also don't have a bassline which is something a LOT of people look for in Techno. And if you do then it's not loud enough to be noticed.

Still, it's good to see that you're improving. Keep on it!

PrototypeX-M-4 responds:

Thank you Burn for reviewing, I'll keep your notes in mind!

Wow.

The Audio Portal is an unforgiving bitch to good artists like yourself

Anyway, this was a pretty awesome piece overall. The part at 0:28 clips a bit, but I can live with that. It was very cool but I think there should have been more melodic singing bits. You have a badass voice, and you're fucking lucky that you can use it. It reminds me of Nick Night of Dream Evil, but a little darker.

And no, Rusty Bucket Bay was the gayest thing ever. If there was one map that I couldn't get the goddamn music notes on, it was that one. So FUCK that reference.

DruoxtheShredder responds:

I couldn't think of any other stages that rhymed with way </3

Have a 5.

And this 10.

Also, grats on the "top 30".

Very nice.

Honestly I don't think I have anything to add or whatever. It all sounded very awesome, and I loved how the ending was a throwback to the beginning. Honestly I would have loved to have heard a harmony in that part leading up to like a huge climax in the end, but different minds, different ideas.

And what are you talking about 'crappy Spider 3'? I have a Spider III 75 and have absolutely no problem with it. Honestly I would like to be able to record without having to mix later on, but that's something I need practice with anyway.

You could look into XLN Audio's Addictive Drums. It's pretty amazing, and you can import the samples you already have into it just for random mixing purposes.

Also, since you use Reaper you could get into that Rock Band thing where you create your own tracks to RB and sell them. You could actually make a profit off of it. I sure as hell would buy your songs. Anyway, keep the metal going man.

Very nice.

Very epic, perfectly depicts the feeling of beginning something new, something epic.

Two things though: There is a tiny gap between the loop, but I think that happens because when you render something as an .mp3 it adds a very small silence at the beginning and end of the file.

Also, the wood stick/clackers or whatever kind of annoy me as time goes on but it's bearable.

Also, I completely understand the whole "I HATE NG! The Audio Portal is SHIT and they NEED to find these 0 bombers and MURDER THEM" but... honestly, I think you just have to stick with it. Eventually you get a hit and people start paying more attention to your works. At least, that's how it happened for me.

I got my Lance Battle thing on the "Top Tracks of All Time" and started gaining a small amount of attention. Not a lot, but enough to show me that the NG community is like 90% cool people, and you can't let those assholes that make up the other 10% push you down.

Plus, someone with your musical talent can't be brought down by this kind of crap. Come on, are you kidding me? With the happy little positive melodies you make? Seriously, you can't be THAT bummed about it.

Nice. Very random.

Very interesting mix, lets do this review thing then.

The bass in the beginning is cool, but I think you kind of overdid it. I mean like it almost sounds like you got people telling you there wasn't enough bass in your songs and so you said "orly? Now I have TONS OF BASS BWAHAHAHAHAHAAA!"

Key changes are good and break up repetition but when overused kind of become repetitive themselves.

3:44... umm... okay just listen to that little bit and tell me what was happening there. Was that the "weird mess-ups" that occurred with the key changes? And again at 4:12.

Suggestions: Maybe start it off softly the way you do, and build up to the harder crazier parts. Think of your song as an upside down pyramid. Start off very minimalist, then come in with something cooler, then cooler, then eventually just blast shit to hell with a beat of awesomeness.

Using this technique is actually psychologically proven to make things cooler than they are. Because if you start off with something small that's what people get used to. Then you add something in and they're like "oooh, cool." Then add more, and more, and it will get cooler and cooler until eventually... as I stated before, you blast shit to hell with a beat of awesomeness.

I think the words I would use to describe this are as follows: Random. Quirky. Trippin. Non-sequitur.

Good job though!

Dachampster responds:

Yeah, I got lazy and copy-pasted that part at 3:44 but I accidentally used the part where the key change happened. Nobody's ever told me i need more bass except for one of my songs where itunes shotgun-blasted the f**k out of it. I think the bass isnt that heavy here to be honest. The reason why this songs weird is because I used a turkish lute for the melody instead of a synth. The climax of the song was supposed to be around 2:11, but I really just had so much trouble with the key changes and pitch that I just gave up. It might have been better if I hadnt submitted it for a while so I could fix that. You see, the problem with the key change wasnt recognizable because in Garageband, when I got those sour notes I restarted to the measure before and then it sounded fine. Then when I come across it again, I fix it, and then when I restart it, it sound over-compensated.

I like make the sound go "bwaaaww"

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